What do you think of my essay?

Very cute essay! Has some grammar errors. Double check your comma usage! The ...(ellipsis) should be removed entirely. When you are talking about The New York Suns newspaper. You should either preface the name with 'a newspaper called' or just underline it and know that it is understood that it is a newspaper. Just a few hints! I hope I have been helpful. I could say more, but I don't want to overwhelm you.